winter down smoothed and unfolded to air

30thSep. × ’09
winter down
smoothed and unfolded
    to air

3 Things About This Haiku

  1. Fall is here with winter on his heels!
  2. One syllable shorter than usual, but smoothed is a bit heavy, and air out would be extra padding.
  3. I need to find some more outdoor activities. I can only walk so far before my knee goes all wobbly. Where did I stuff my fold-away bike? Can my bum take it? And can you write a haiku while you ride a bike?
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